Caving Feedback Form
Read my poem and give me some feedback?
Another world unlike my own
a stranger in a strange place with no where to go
the walls cave in and darkness like strings pull me tight
no sign of light
Release in the form of a smile
feelings unfelt but shown for fear of banter
Walking through the strange world
applause and approval for what, a lie, a doll
in the forest of misconception -
Sunshine, songbird, serenity, serendipity
under the dancing puppet
is the broken puppeteer, controlling, performing
hoping to actually see the light
I’m just curious to what people think?? Any responses are welcome
I am not a poet i know, it’s pretty rough. Poetry and song lyric writing is just a way for me to express my inner self. Thankyou x
I think it’s really pretty. I like your use of alliteration. My favorite line is “A stranger in a strange place with nowhere to go” It’s a bit like my life :/
Regulus Black – It’s too late to apologize